No Winter Lasts Forever…

The snowflake lands on her nose.

“Spring, Mommy?”

Throat tightening, she searches for words, “It’s supposed to be, dear.”

Wonder fills the little girl’s eyes tracing the path as more flakes fall.

Mom wraps her arms around herself, more lingering than just winter’s chill.

16 thoughts on “No Winter Lasts Forever…

  1. Ah, those unspoken truths that the mother can’t/won’t share with her child. You did a nice job of conveying the mother’s angst here. Having both characters as “she” did make me work a little harder than I wanted to to figure out who was being referred to. I wonder how this would read if it was written from the mother’s perspective in first person (so the mother is “I” and the daughter is “she”)?

    Liked by 1 person

    • So true, and what may seem so simple, such as a snowflake in spring, can represent so much more- at least that’s what I was hoping to convey. I was working on my “show don’t tell” after reading some articles suggested to me, and I’m not 100% on how I did with that.

      Like

  2. I liked how the cold mimicked the mother having to close off the parts of herself that the can’t show and the innocent obliviousness to the child. I think this — more lingering than just winter’s chill. — and me questioning what was lingering as I don’t know what it is modifying in the previous phrase. Thought I would point it out.

    Liked by 1 person

    • By all means, point away! I wanted it to be vague, but do you think it takes away or is just too unclear? I wanted it to be like the snow is lingering but so is whatever has happened to mom that is making her “cold”… does that make sense? Lol

      Like

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s